IBMC #8 – The Nursery Rhyme Challenge – Dodoitsu

Original:
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Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall
Humpty Dumpty had a great fall
All the kings horses and all the kings men
Couldn’t put Humpty together again

Dodoitsu:
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natures troubled on a wall
undecided problems all
if it falls life’s all ended
can not be mended
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© Mick E Talbot 2017/66


IBMC #8 – The Nursery Rhyme Challenge

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4 thoughts on “IBMC #8 – The Nursery Rhyme Challenge – Dodoitsu”

    1. Thanks Sangbad,
      Take note though, I’ve bent the rules, or maybe I should not of referred to it as Dodoitsu at al. Right syllable count, 7.7.7.5, however in a correctly composed one it should not rhyme and be non-metrical. Thanks again,

      Mick

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